1Well, Amina, thanks for letting me have your draft in such good time.
2Oh, that's alright.
3I was just very anxious to hear what you think of it.
4You can see that I decided to change the topic.
5I had been interested in looking at Barings Factory.
6Oh, I think the hospital was a much better choice.
7In fact... well... I have to say that I thought it was good.
8Oh?
9There's still lots of work to be done...
10Oh yes... of course.
11But there's plenty of good ideas.
12It opens well and the first chapter is fine
13but the middle section really stood out for me... most interesting.
14That's amazing
15because I really didn't find it a bit easy to write...
16How long did you work on the whole thing?
17Well, I spent about two or three weeks reading and doing general research
18and then I dashed the writing off very quickly...
19so about four weeks in all.
20Well, that's about par for the course.
21You've got a while yet to make the changes.
22Oh right... no problem...
23Right. Let's have a look at my notes here.
24Okay. Starting with section headings...
25the broad divisions are good but you'll have to re-do the actual headings.
26I've made some suggestions in the margins...
27Okay. Thanks.
28Now, this information on local housing...
29I can see why you put it there
30but it really isn't relevant to the approach you've taken.
31I think I see what you mean.
32Now... what did I say about the interviews?
33I worked very hard on those.
34I really thought they were valuable.
35They are, Amina, but they're very complex and rather unclear at the moment.
36You're going to have to spend a bit of time making the data a lot clearer.
37Okay...
38as long as I don't have to remove them altogether...
39No, don't worry.
40What about the chronology...
41the list of dates?
42I wasn't sure whether I should rewrite those.
43My advice on that is to take them out. I feel it makes the whole piece appear too simplistic.
44Okay, if it'll help.
45Now, there are a couple of other books I'd like you to look at.
46Have you got a pen?
47Right... Approaches to Local History by John Mervis...
48Right...
49And then I think you need to think about ways of representing interview data.
50Have a look at Sight and Sound by Kate Oakwell.
51Sight and Sound.
52Then you know I'm going away on holiday next week...
53Yes.
54So when you've made the changes, I suggest you show the work to your Support Tutor.
55Support Tutor... right...
56Then you do the proof reading...
57Proof reading...
58When by, do you think?
59I'd aim for the 29th of June
60and after that you should get it laser printed...
61but be careful because the computer centre closes on 10 July.
62And then I hand it in to...?
63Oh, the Faculty Office as usual.
64Okay, that's fine.
65I think I'm all set now!
66Thanks very much for all your help.
67A pleasure.
68See you when I get back.
69Yep. Thanks, Dr Bryson.
70Bye.
71Bye.