1Hello, Helen. Sorry I'm late.
2Hi, Jeremy, no problem.
3Well we'd better work out where we are on our project, I suppose.
4Yeah. I've looked at the drawings you've done for my story, 'The Forest',
5and I think they're brilliant - they really create the atmosphere I had in mind when I was writing it.
6I'm glad you like them.
7There are just a few suggestions I'd like to make.
8Go ahead.
9Now, I'm not sure about the drawing of the cave -
10it's got trees all around it, which is great,
11but the drawing's a bit too static, isn't it?
12I think it needs some action.
13Yes, there's nothing happening.
14Perhaps I should add the boy - Malcolm, isn't it?
15He would be walking up to it.
16Yes, let's have Malcolm in the drawing.
17And what about putting in a tiger -
18the one that he makes friends with a bit later? Maybe it could be sitting under a tree washing itself.
19And the tiger stops in the middle of what it's doing when it sees Malcolm walking past.
20That's a good idea.
21OK, I'll have a go at that.
22Then there's the drawing of the crowd of men and women dancing.
23They're just outside the forest, and there's a lot going on.
24That's right, you wanted them to be watching a carnival procession, but I thought it would be too crowded.
25Do you think it works like this?
26Yes, I like what you've done.
27The only thing is, could you add Malcolm to it, without changing what's already there.
28What about having him sitting on the tree trunk on the right of the picture?
29Yes, that would be fine.
30And do you want him watching the other people?
31No, he's been left out of all the fun, so I'd like him to be crying -
32that'll contrast nicely with the next picture,
33where he's laughing at the clowns in the carnival.
34Right, I'll do that.
35And then the drawing of the people ice skating in the forest.
36I wasn't too happy with that one.
37Because they're supposed to be skating on grass aren't they?
38That's right, and it's frozen over.
39At the moment it doesn't look quite right.
40I see what you mean.
41I'll have another go at that.
42And I like the wool hats they're wearing.
43Maybe you could give each of them a scarf as well.
44Yeah, that's easy enough.
45They can be streaming out behind the people to suggest they're skating really fast.
46Great.
47Well that's all on the drawings.
48Right.
49So you've finished writing your story and I just need to finish illustrating it,
50and my story and your drawings are done.
51So the next thing is to decide what exactly we need to write about in the report that goes with the stories,
52and how we're going to divide the work.
53Right, Helen.
54What do you think about including a section on how we planned the project as a whole, Jeremy?
55That's probably quite important.
56Yeah. Well, you've had most of the good ideas so far.
57How do you feel about drafting something,
58then we can go through it together and discuss it?
59OK, that seems reasonable.
60And I could include something on how we came up with the ideas for our two stories, couldn't I?
61Well, I've started writing something about that,
62so why don't you do the same and we can include the two things.
63Right.
64So what about our interpretation of the stories?
65Do we need to write about what we think they show,
66like the value of helping other people, all that sort of thing?
67That's going to come up later isn't it?
68I think everyone in the class is going to read each other's stories
69and come up with their own interpretations which we're going to discuss.
70Oh, I missed that.
71So it isn't going to be part of the report at all?
72No.
73But we need to write about the illustrations, because they're an essential element of children's experience of reading the stories.
74It's probably easiest for you to write that section, as you know more about drawing than I do.
75Maybe, but I find it quite hard to write about.
76I'd be happier if you did it.
77OK.
78So when do you think...